Wednesday, 26 October 2016

My literacy blog

Hi and welcome back. Today I will share with you what I have been working on for writing. This  is what my first draft looks like. Here is my writing.


One day when Danny was at the tropical beach he suddenly saw a very beautiful girl running down the beach foot path with her dog. So Danny ran up the hill and asked what is your name young lady. My name is Sandy and my dogs name is Sasha.

We are here for a run down the beach because it is such a nice day.Well then would You  like to come and play with me or would like to keep on running.

Well I would like to have a little  break . well then what are you waiting for come and play. Ok I am coming I just need to tie Sasha up to a pole or something else.  Na, she can come and play said Danny. Ok come on Sasha let's all go and play in the waves. Insted, we can make a sand castle said Sandy.  Like this one











Well then let's start building “I’ll go and get some water and you can get some sand for us” said Sandy. 8 hours later


Wow What  a great day should we meet again tomorrow here at the beach and have a picnic said Danny. Well then what time shall we meet asked Sandy. 2pm said Danny. Great see you tomorrow said Sandy.


Thank you for reading my blog.

By Anika Jerram

6 comments:

  1. Amazing piece of writing Anika. You put lots detail into your writing which put a picture in my head.
    Well done!

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  2. wow what an am amazing sand castle did you build it

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  3. Wow I really love how you put alot of detail in this piece of Writing and I really like how you put in the photos they look so cool

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  4. Wow Anika I really love how you put as much detail into this piece of writing and I really like the pictures of the sandcastles they look so amazing

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